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这篇文章论证的是人的成就取决于后天培养而非先天遗传。
01首先是用一种怪像引起全文话题:优秀究竟源于什么?
①If you were to examine the birth certificates of every soccer player in 2006's World Cup tournament, you would most likely find a noteworthy quirk: elite soccer players are more likely to have been born in the earlier months of the year than in the later months.②If you then examined the European national youth teams that feed the World Cup and professional ranks, you would find this strange phenomenon to be even more pronounced.如果查看一下2006年世界杯赛所有足球运动员的出生证,你很可能会发现一件引人注意的奇事:出类拔萃的足球运动员更可能出生在一年中的头几个月而非后几个月。如果再看看为世界杯和职业球队输送人才的欧洲各国国家青年队(的队员出生证),你会发现这一奇怪现象甚至更为显著。
该段用两个if you描述现象,If you were to XX, you would most likely find a noteworthy quirk:YY.If you then examined MM , you would find this strange phenomenon to be even more pronounced. 如果你XX,你很可能会发现一件引人注意的奇事:YY。如果再看看MM,你会发现这一奇怪现象甚至更为显著。
这个可以写作借鉴: 比如表达自我驱动力的重要性:
If we look at the impact of self-motivation on students' learning, we would most likely find a noteworthy comparsion: those who have self-motivation are more likely to perform better in various kinds of tests.If the same topic turn to the workplace,we would find this phenomenon to be even more pronounced. 如果我们看一下自我驱动力对学生学习的影响,我们很可能会发现一个很明显的对比:那些有自我驱动力的学生在各类考试中都更可能表现更好。如果同样的话题转到职场,你会发现这一现象甚至更为显著。
这段话中pronouced,明显的;显著的;是一个非常值得记忆的词汇。 某某现象更为显著的表达:the phenomenon are even more pronounced 如社会不公平越来明显可以写:inequalities in society are becoming more pronounced
02罗列对怪像成因的猜想,从而折射出两种对立观点:优秀源于先天因素VS优秀与先天无关。
该文罗列猜想的表达是这样的:What might account for this strange phenomenon?Here are a few guesses: ……
我们在写作时也可以先把观点罗列一下,然后逐点展开讲述。
如描写就业和求职相关主题
A condidrable amount of youngesters fail to stand out in a competitive job market. What might account for their dilemma? Three factors might play a key role: specialized knowledge, practical experience and active efforts.相当一部分的年轻人在竞争激烈的就业市场上无法脱颖而出。什么导致了他们的困境?其中有三个因素可能相当关键:专业知识,实践经验和主观努力。
03通过介绍一项心理学研究提出并论证观点:优秀源于后天努力。
……This success, coupled with later research showing that memory itself is not genetically determined, led Ericsson to conclude that the act of memorizing is more of a cognitive exercise than an intuitive one. 这次成功,加上后续的表明记忆力本身并非由基因决定的研究,使得艾利克森得出结论:记忆行为与其说是一种直觉活动,不如说是一种认知活动。
这段我们可以借鉴用于段尾,或者文末总结:
All those examples , coupled with a widely accepted view that“Well do is better than well say”,we can conclude that in order not to be washed out in competition, we should attach importance to mobilizing our initiative for solutions and avoid missing opportunities because of excuses in the face of adversity. 所有的这些例子,加之大众都广为认可的一个观点:空谈不如实干,我们可以得出下面的结论:为了不在竞争中遭到淘汰,面对逆境时我们应该重视调动自己的积极性主动寻找解决办法,同时避免因寻找借口而错失机会。
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